Since later you say he's the most feared of the lord (Lord?)'s angels, shouldn't he say he's no one's creation but god/God's? (It's not my religion, though.)
Also, typo alert in the last paragraph:
His was a tiresome task, to forever severe the mortal coils that shackled men and women.
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Date: 2007-07-15 01:31 am (UTC)nitpick:
"I am no one's creation but my own."
Since later you say he's the most feared of the lord (Lord?)'s angels, shouldn't he say he's no one's creation but god/God's? (It's not my religion, though.)
Also, typo alert in the last paragraph:
His was a tiresome task, to forever sever
ethe mortal coils that shackled men and women.